2011년 4월 2일 토요일

To where is the South Korean education system going?


             What is the most fundamental function of education? This question should be differentiated from asking ‘what is the purpose of learning,’ because of the different scale each word cover. ‘Learning’ is usually used in the perspective of students-somebody who need to take knowledge and put it in their brains. This is important, since nobody can grow up properly without proper learning. However, ‘Education’ has even more importance than ‘Learning’ just has, due to the fact that wise teacher is more crucial in society than wise children. Everybody becomes a student in some time, but not each one of them can become a teacher. Without teachers, there are no education of kids and thus no learning in school-which is seriously damaging in today’s world, where schools are quite common. The need of teacher, which can be substituted by the need of education, is based on this formula: teacher (same as educator, or education itself) is someone who can provide more than books can. Back to the first question, this is the most basic function of education: let children experience and enjoy life, raise their diverse creativity, and most importantly, give them inspiration-both academic and living-over the simple knowledge books have.

             Like this, the concept of education contains so many crucial things that influence children to ‘grow up.’ However, the education system in South Korea tends to see children just as the imperfect beings which need to be finished products as fast as possible. Lots of video clips on harsh school life made by South Korean students, recently increased greatly in its number, directly show how heavy the education in this small peninsular is. In South Korea, from the elementary school kids in age 7 to the high school students in age 18, 12 years of school life before university seems only as the preparation for KSAT, the one-shot entrance examination for domestic colleges.[1] There are barely no teachers in public schools who successfully do what a teacher should do-no critical thinking but only cram for exams. From the very start of school life, children are mostly evaluated only by their scores and grades. There are some differences in private schools, but only ‘social bourgeoisies’ in South Korea can make enough money for tuition. There is not much educational welfare in the country. Perhaps that’s why every parents and kids in South Korea make excessive efforts to get into renowned universities-which somehow guarantee the abundant life after graduation, so allow them to send their children to high quality private school. Basically, this vicious circle of college degree, social position, and future income make parents and students go mad only at ‘numerical results’-no middle process of any meaningful learning from school. One phenomenal example of the fierce educational competition in South Korea is “gireogi appa,” literally a "goose dad" whose kids go abroad and live with mother for learning foreign language. These dads live alone in South Korea, earning money only for the education of their children.[2]

             In this education system, South Korean students are easily exhausted. The system is mostly focusing on results, and ignoring the procedure of each student’s unique creativity development. Naturally, the students who are not accustomed to choosing right answers should be seen as poor ones. Only the “correct answer pickers” can grab the decent position of honor students in South Korea. However, this method has a significant risk (or maybe a wrong presupposition): every child does not have the same features. Depend on characteristic, disposition, and many other factors, the strong points of each student must be different. But current system in South Korea mandates to its students to follow one standardized path. Sir Ken Robinson once talked about human creativity: “…life is not linear, it's organic. We create our lives symbiotically as we explore our talents in relation to the circumstances they help to create for us…human communities depend upon a diversity of talent, not a singular conception of ability.”[3] However, unlike what he said, the South Korean public education sorts out every “mutant student” from its territory-which is quite old-fashioned style, not encouraging students to find individual aptitude but manufacturing them through conveyor belt for the needs of society. Mr. Robinson talked about this problem too, warning the danger of “cramming education”: “…if you’re not prepared to be wrong, you’ll never come up with anything original. And by the time they get to be adults, most kids have lost that capacity…we are now running national education systems where mistakes are the worst thing you can make.”[4]

             Considering current situation, there needs a total reform in education scene of South Korea. First and foremost, the social view on the purpose of education should be changed. It is not to make the cohorts of student desirable stereotype of society, but to let them have life and talents, find their own reason for studying. Like Anatole France, a French novelist, once said, we should acknowledge that “the errors of enthusiasm” is more preferable than “the indifference of wisdom.” in today’s society.[5] Only from diversified thinking without the fear for being wrong we can expect extended creativity, and only from this extensive creativeness the students can have nutritious environment for their talents in schools. One possible alternative is the “Waldorf education,” a humanistic approach to pedagogy. This approach concentrates on the interdisciplinary, integrating practical, artistic, and conceptual elements of learning, and emphasizes the role of the imagination (creativity) in it. Schools and teachers are given considerable freedom to define curricula under the arch of Waldorf education.[6] Secondly, the social support for the education should be enlarged. The education in Finland gives an effective answer for this matter. Finland requires no tuition fees for full-time students in its main educational system. Before the age for college, there are two lines of school: upper secondary, which focuses on academic, and vocational, which provides occupation training. Finnish people don’t think one is superior over the other. The society opens the room for each different talent. Finnish politicians set their education’s purpose to educate the vast majority of Finns to a higher degree-leaving no stragglers behind,[7] contrastive to the education in South Korea which guarantees good quality teaching only for wealthy students.

             We should ask one more time: “What is the main goal of education?” Nobody can deny the long history of antiquated education in South Korea. Now it’s time for changing fixed concept with new paradigm-teaching not for the sake of high scoring, but for the sake of individual child. Every student should have the right to expand personal talents and creativity, which include the possible capacity for changing our society in various ways. To accomplish this, both the common viewpoint on teaching and current social support for schools and teachers should be changed simultaneously. Finally, we should know our children are raw stones-which can be a precious jewel with soft care, but also can be left as useless stones if not treated properly. The future of education in South Korea shall be something which let its students spread their wings freely.

References

[1] Video Clip: An Issue of Concern: Korean Education - Raising Dragons URL http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eMwUwIi8a5s&feature=fvsr

[2] Wikipedia Article: Education in South Korea URL http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Education_in_Korea

[3] Sir Ken Robinson on TED, “Bring on the Learning Revolution” URL http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=r9LelXa3U_I
[4] Sir Ken Robinson on TED, “Do Schools Kill Creativity?” URL http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iG9CE55wbtY
[5] Wikipedia Article: Anatole France URL http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Anatole_France
[6] Wikipedia Article: Waldorf Education URL http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Waldorf_education
[7] Wikipedia Article: Education in Finland URL http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Education_in_Finland

04 02 2011 Chang Woo Jung
AP Lang at KMLA

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  1. What is the most fundamental function of education? This question should be differentiated from asking (")what is the purpose of learning,(") because of the different scale each word coverS. (")Learning(") is usually used TO DESCRIBE THE TASKS OF STUDENTS (DELETE in the perspective of students) - THE ACT OF ACCUMULATING KNOWLEDGE AND STORING IT IN THE BRAIN (DELETE somebody who need to take knowledge and put it in their brains). This is important, since NO ONE (DELETE nobody) can grow up properly without proper learning. However, (")Education(") has even more importance than (")Learning(") (DELETE just has), due to the fact that A wise teacher is more crucial in society than wise children. Everybody becomes a student AT SOME POINT IN THEIR LIVES (DELETE in some time), but not EVERYBODY (DELETE each one of them can) becomeS a teacher. Without teachers, CHILDREN CAN'T BE EDUCATED (DELETE there are no education of kids and thus no learning in school-which is seriously damaging in today’s world, where schools are quite common). The need FOR teacherS, (DELETE which can be substituted by the need of education,) is based on this formula: a teacher (DELETE (same as educator, or education itself)) is someone who can provide more than books can.
    (NEW PARAGRAPH)
    (DELETE EVERYTHING Back to the first question, this is the most basic function of education:) THREFORE, IT IS IMPORTANT TO let children experience and enjoy life, raise their diverse creativity, and most importantly, give them inspiration ( - ) both academic and living ( - ) over the simple knowledge books OFFER (DELETE have).

    (Since you are one of my many favorite students - I have to be honest and mean here. Get ready!:) This intro is confusing, too long, and too complicated. It's taking common knowledge and inflating it with needless discussion. Schools are common? This is not new information or even opinion. If we scraped away 90% of the words here we might find a worthy statement - but I don't know if we even need it. I keep telling you guys to get to the point, and no where is this more important than the first paragraph where a reader searches for a thesis. Is this an essay about teachers? An etymology analysis of definitions? You can't keep your reader guessing for more than a sentence or two before they decide to make a sandwich instead of continuing to read.)

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  2. However, the education system in South Korea tends to see children just as (DELETE the) imperfect beings which need to BECOME (DELETE be) finished products as fast as possible. RECENTLY, MANY (DELETE Lots of) video clips DEPICTING (DELETE on) harsh school life made by South Korean students HAVE (DELETE recently) increased greatly in (DELETE its) number(.) THEY directly show how heavy the education SYSTEM ON (DELETE in) this small PENINSULA (DELETE peninsular) is. (DELETE In South Korea,) From (DELETE the) elementary school (DELETE kids in age 7) to (DELETE the) high school(,) (DELETE students in age 18,) THE 12 years of EDUCATION (DELETE school life) before university seems only as the preparation for THE KSAT ( - ) the one-shot entrance examination for domestic colleges.[1]

    (NEW PARAGRAPH)
    DUE TO THIS REGIME, There are barely ANY (DELETE no) teachers in public schools who successfully do what a teacher should do(.) INSTEAD OF ENCOURAGING (DELETE no) critical thinking OR ENGAGING IN CREATIVE THOUGHT, STUDENTS ARE FORCED TO (DELETE but only) cram for exams. From the very start of school life, children are mostly evaluated only ACCORDING TO (DELETE by) their scores and grades. There are some differences in private schools, but only THE (")social bourgeoisies(") in South Korea can make enough money for tuition(,) IN A NATION WHERE there is not much educational welfare (DELETE in the country). Perhaps that’s why every PARENT (DELETE parents) and CHILD (DELETE kidsin South Korea) MAKES (DELETE make) excessive effort to get into renowned universities ( - ) which somehow guarantee the abundant life after graduation(.) (DELETE so allow them to send their children to high quality private school.) Basically, this vicious circle of college degree, social position, and future income make parents and students OBSESSED WITH (DELETE go mad only at) numerical results(,) THEREFORE LOSING SIGHT OF (DELETE -no middle process of any) meaningful learning from school. One phenomenal example of the fierce educational competition in South Korea is THE “gireogi appa,” literally a "goose dad" whose kids go abroad and live with THEIR mother for learning A foreign language. These dads live alone in South Korea, earning money only for the education of their children.[2]

    (Much improved second paragraph. Once this essay gets going - it moves and informs. Avoid the padding and excessive discussion in your intros. These paragraphs are also far too chunky and big - so don't be afraid to make new paragraphs. "5 paragraph" structure refers moreso to "5 component" structure. I'd like to see a more clear thesis statment. I know your theme (the problems of Korea's education), but I'd like that focused into one clear statment that provides a map for the essay.)

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  3. Naturally, the students who are not accustomed to choosing THE right answers should be seen as THE poor ones.

    However, this method has a significant risk (or maybe a wrong presupposition): every child does not have the same ABILITY (DELETE features). DependING on characteristicS, dispositionS, and many other factors, the strong points of each student ARE OBVIOUSLY (DELETE must be) different. But THE current system in South Korea mandates THAT (DELETE to its) students (DELETE to) follow one standardized path.

    (NEW PARAGRAPH)

    Sir Ken Robinson (WHO IS HE? BRIEFLY INTRODUCE WHO HE IS. LOOK ON WIKI) once talked about human creativity: “…life is not linear, it's organic. We create our lives symbiotically as we explore our talents in relation to the circumstances they help to create for us…human communities depend upon a diversity of talent, not a singular conception of ability.”[3]

    (Sort out some issues of clarity in the quote. It's okay to skip some things he said, but try and format them so they surface as clear sentences. Capitalize the first word so it stands out as an idea. I think there's a problem with "create for us…human")

    (NEW PARAGRAPH)

    CONTRARY TO ROBINSON'S WORDS, (DELETE However, unlike what he said), the South Korean public education sorts out every “mutant student” from its territory ( - ) which is quite AN old-fashioned style, not encouraging students to find individual aptitude(.) INSTEAD, THIS SYSTEM IS manufacturing them through A conveyor belt for the needs of society. Mr. Robinson talked about this problem AS WELL (DELETE too), warning ABOUT the danger of “cramming education”: “…(CAPITALIZE if) If you’re not prepared to be wrong, you’ll never come up with anything original. And by the time they get to be adults, most kids have lost that capacity…(W)e are now running national education systems where mistakes are the worst thing you can make.”[4]

    (Excellent. You are working with the best parts of Robsinson's speech, and have done so more effectively than the rest of the class, weaving in your own arguments and gaining credible support for them. However, when you format these quotes you have to capitalize so things can be read cleanly and clearly. Brush up on your MLA style of quoting, which most universities use:

    http://www.aresearchguide.com/5quoting.html)

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  4. Considering THE current situation, there needs TO BE a total reform OF (DELETE in) education (DELETE scene of) IN South Korea.

    THE PURPOSE (DELETE It) SHOULD NOT BE (DELETE is not) to make (DELETE the cohorts of) studentS desirable stereotypeS of society, but to let them have life and talents, AND find their own reason for studying. Like Anatole France, a French novelist, once said, we should acknowledge that “(')the errors of enthusiasm(') ARE (DELETE is) more preferable than (')the indifference of wisdom(') in today’s society(").[5] Only from diversified thinking without the fear OF (DELETE for) being wrong CAN we (DELETE can) expect extended creativity(;) and only from this extensive creativeness CAN the students (DELETE can) have A nutritious environment for their talents in schools.

    (NEW PARAGRAPH)

    One possible alternative is A SYSTEM CALLED (DELETE the) “Waldorf education,” WHICH IS a humanistic approach to pedagogy. This INTERDISCIPLINARY approach concentrates on (DELETE the interdisciplinary,) integrating practical, artistic, and conceptual elements of learning, and emphasizes the role of the imagination (creativity) WITHIN (DELETE in) it. Schools and teachers are given considerable freedom to define curricula under the arch of Waldorf education.[6]

    The FINNISH society opens the DOOR (DELETE room) for each different talent. Finnish politicians set their education’s purpose to educate the vast majority of Finns to a higher degree ( - ) leaving no stragglers behind(.)[7] IN CONTRAST (DELETE contrastive) to the education in South Korea, WE FIND A SYSTEM which guarantees good quality teaching only for wealthy students.

    (EXCELLENT paragraph above.)

    We should ask one more time: “What is the main goal of education?” Nobody can deny the long history of antiquated education in South Korea. Now it’s time for changing THE fixed concept with A new paradigm ( - ) teaching not for the sake of high SCORES (DELETE scoring), but for the sake of THE individual child. Every student should have the right to expand personal talents and creativity, which include the possible capacitIES TO (DELETE for) CHANGE (DELETE changing) our society in various ways. To accomplish this, both the common viewpoint on teaching and current social support for schools and teachers should be changed simultaneously. Finally, we should know our children are raw stones ( - ) which can be POLISHED INTO precious jewelS with soft care(.) ACCORDINGLY, (DELETE but) THEY CAN also (DELETE can) be left as useless stones if not treated properly. The future of education in South Korea SHOULD BE REINVENTED (DELETE shall be) AS A SYSTEM (DELETE something) which letS its students spread their wings freely.

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  5. I'm not sure if I gave you feedback, as I was distracted by midterms, and my comments seem to go direct to your spam.

    Anyways, other than the intro (we talked about it), this is a really good essay. You and Jam have similar tendencies towards these obtuse intros, so always keep this is mind: what's my essay REALLY about, and how much detour will my reader tolerate? In other essays for other courses a creative intro isn't a bad thing, but for AP - effective communication that is always performing an assigned duty is what we are aiming for. You are obviously a smart guy who likes to explore different angles, evaluate definitions, and suggest variables. This is good to point, but to improve your writing you need to deliver the goods more clearly and deliberately. When you have a clear idea of what you want to say - you do this well. The paragraphs re. Waldorf/Robinson/Finland are some of the better explored paragraphs I've read for this essay in the class. The intro you had might have been a result of searching for what you were writing about? A bit of a brainstorm? Do that in your brain until you have a clear theme/thesis and then offer a decisive intro (see Seewan and Tina's intros).

    Good work. Looking forward to a second draft after midterms.

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